Friday, February 3, 2012

4. The Proposal

He looked me in the eye, reached nervously for my hand, then tentatively slid the antique diamond ring on my third finger.    
“Sophie, will you marry me?” 
“No,” I said, “I won’t.” 

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(another one for the trifecta writing contest, tell a story in three sentences)

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    1. poor guy, so unsure of himself. maybe that is the problem?

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  2. I think it's a good sign that I want a fourth sentence to know why she rejected him.

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    1. or is that a bad sign that I did not complete the story? yikes........

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    1. I feel for him, too, and he is my character I made up. ha!

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  4. Ohh, I like the twist at the end. I also like that she lets him get the ring on before she says no!

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    1. maybe she is in shock, like what the hell is he doing? or maybe she is just a contestant on that "Bachelorette" tv show!

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  5. Oh, that's a kick n the nuts! He should have asked before he slid the ring on.

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  6. Direct, perfect, and liberated. Love it! Although... I do feel bad for the guy :)

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  7. Thanks for joining Trifextra Week 2. I like the simplicity of your story. You managed to say the entire story with not very many words at all. "No, I won't." pretty much ends that story, doesn't it? :-) Come back on Monday for the weekday prompt!

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    1. you know I will be back, most likely with 3 entries!

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  8. Well, I think he misinterpreted the signals here. Great story!

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    1. yes! I think so.

      thanks for reading. :)

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  9. "Antique" ring made me think "mother's wedding ring"...probably a good thing she said "no"?

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    1. maybe no money? had to get the old ring from mom?

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