She showed up on his doorstep, frazzled and lost. Nobody home. She made herself comfortable. Too comfortable. When he and his parents returned, they were (predictably) not happy. Good thing she was beautiful.
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re-tell a famous story is 33 words
Oh I love it!! Perfection. I could actually see myself telling it this way to a niece or nephew for the hundredth story of the night :)
ReplyDeletethanks Rachel! can't wait to read your story too!
DeleteLoved this line: " Good thing she was beautiful." Nicely done.
ReplyDeletethanks, Tara! that was actually the line in my head that inspired the whole thing. :)
DeleteI'm glad I'm not the only one who went the fairy tale route! I love the '(predictably) not happy' part.
ReplyDeletethanks! enjoyed your 3 little pigs story too! :)
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ReplyDeletethanks! and I loved your take on tale of 2 cities!
Deleteoh that sassy little Goldilocks :)
ReplyDeleteshe does have a sense of entitlement, no?
DeleteI am pretty much an expert on Goldilocks these days and I think you nailed it.
ReplyDeletethanks! I have 2 sons (ages 5 and 8) and how much you wanna bet that at least one of them marries a girl like this? (I'd better mentally prepare myself ahead of time.........)
DeleteThanks for linking up this weekend. I love how you have the bears as being predictably unhappy. Not only is it predictable because, really, who would be happy about the situation, but also because predictability and repetition kind of rule in this story, don't they? Nicely done. Hope to see you back on Monday.
ReplyDeleteThis feels so modern, I like it.
ReplyDeletethank you, judges thought differently. :(
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